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Not to make a perfect world, 
But to find beauty in our flawed one.
Because It makes me feel like a god, 
I can create mountains,
And then destroy them.
I don't like this world,
So I create my own.
Because I want to prove emotions exist,
I want to make people scream, cry, throw things, all because of my words.
On the off chance I can create something just a little more than words on a page.
Because no one really listens,
When I talk.
Because I'm in love with the sound the keys make when you type,
And the way the pencil moves over paper.
Because I want people to care about my characters,
The way I care about theirs.
Because I can't live forever,
But I can create something that will.
But mostly,
Mostly,

Because I want to change the world.
These might not be all of your reasons, but theyre all of mine. Comment and tell me what you think!
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I'm not too sure about what vision means, but i'm going to go off of how I interpret it. i believe that you've presented your view on writing and literature beautifully. Many people, myself included can definitely relate to what you've written.

For originality, I rank this a 3.5 because I have never seen a piece about this particular topic. But i have seen a few about other things, saying that they're means of escape and about the beauty of creating something. But it did surprise me, so it deserves the extra .5.

I'm not too sure about technique, so i gave a 3.5 to be safe.

Finally, this piece did get me thinking, and i believe it speaks for all writers, so 5 stars. It's a very beautiful piece of literature and definitely paints an image in your head.

This is my first review, so hopefully I did an okay job. :)
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I wanted to do this critique mostly because of this great impact this poem has.

Firstly, this poem gives the audience a very vivid image of "God" and his ability to create in this world. It also paints a realistic picture of the human nature.

Secondly, the use of imagery and repetition is extremely effective. The constant expanding of the original opinion shows the audience a strong message. This compliments my other point, this poem is amazing because of the impact it states.

Yes, life has its downs, nobody is perfect, but we can always choose to look on the brighter side. Overall, this poem gives a realistic description of our current world, presents the author's intense passion for writing and gives hope to readers that there is something noble, boundless in this world, that we should not be hindered from our desires because of the rules the world set for us.
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Sisypheheureux24 Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2014
I write for the same reasons !! 
I completely agree !! Very beautiful !!!
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Bbburn Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2014
Thank you!
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Softballlife16 Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014
This is great! Keep doing what your doing!
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Bbburn Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2014
Thank you!
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Softballlife16 Featured By Owner Apr 10, 2014
no problem
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theworldofpoetry Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014
These are EXACTLY the same reasons why I write poetry! I have written similar things but I can never really tell the world my love for writing. You did a fantastic job! :)
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Bbburn Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014
Thank you :) 
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theworldofpoetry Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014
Not a problem! :)
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rainpeltkitty Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is just beautiful.  
I agree so much.
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Bbburn Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014
Thank you :)
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